My poem for April 3 is a less structured than those I usually write, although I have built in my own structure. It’s not the kind of poem I generally share, so I would love feedback.
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I cast my gaze heavenward
(if you believe in pearly gates
and angels) above the clouds
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a hawk was circling, tracking
dinner (apologies to vegetarians)
waiting to swoop in for the kill
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my eye catches a hummingbird
hovering near red flowers just
moments before speeding off
to inspire another poet.
Hey Cheryl,
I like the shape of it. I really like the way it looks like a cropped barrel, and I also liked the choice of initial lc and UC 2nd letter for each stanza. Makes me think of lift. You’ve got a lot in a deceptively small space. I also get a sense of the near-infinite while looking at the shy, which isn’t sustainable, requiring closer marvels, no less marvellous about avian hovercraft and rich nose of the bloom. Well done.
not sericu is the reCatcha. I just found out what Recaptchas are used for, and I’m not resentful any more.
Thanks for the feedback, Bruce. I hope to share a few more poems instead of just cranking out haiku — which is not much of a challenge 😉
I like that reCaptcha is used to build better word recognition in digitization projects. Also, one only has to enter it once on my blog and then you’re in. Unless I block ya. 🙂